Well, I was about to swear off the CoWrite contest after reading the last winner's pages but then I came up with an idea that I really liked and decided to try one more time. Unfortunately, I didn't work on it at all until tonight and I can't seem to get everything I'd like to be done in 10 - 12 pages. I still kind of like my entry but it's a bit lacking in action. There's some decent tension but I'm not sure it accomplishes everything the judges want. They seem to focus on moving the plot ahead at a breakneck pace and hitting plot points like they're going out of style.

Here's the rough draft of my latest entry. Not sure what to do. I might try to pare it down a bit and add more plot to it or possibly add in a couple scenes with some of the other supporting characters but for now, it is what it is.

UPDATE: I've rejiggered those earlier pages and hopefully cleared up any typos or what not (but anyone whose read this blog knows that that isn't likely) and have what might be a better albeit still convoluted entry.