Here's the third part of "Freaks". We get a little more action in these five pages and our first on-screen kill. The previous pages can be found over here and you can just download the PDF of these next five pages right here.

At this point, I think I've set up the first act pretty well. The townspeople seem like good guys, something seems a little off with the Freaks, and the presence of a threat comes up here at the end of Act One. This is more of a Stephen King style thriller; a few scares and some creepy tension in the beginning and then all hell breaks loose in the third act. I'm just not sure if anything in these opening 20 pages really grabs the reader. It's competent but mere competence isn't going sell a screenplay. 

Continue reading to check out the end of Act 1 of "Freaks".