Well, the second winner of the CoWrite contest was announced and I wasn't really a fan of those pages either. I might not enter after this week but a lot depends on the where the story heads in this third ten pages. And who knows, maybe I might just win. Anyway, here are my next pages.

I tried to hit every plot point and reintroduce characters since it seems that is what the judges are looking for. Who knows? I don't know why I'm surprised but this seems like something that the guys at Benderspink just threw together on a lark and as a way to drum up some money. The prize is $2000 bucks so if they can get just 200 entrants at 10 bucks a pop, pretty much everything else is profit. Yes, they have to pay for the site but it's very basic so I can't imagine they are spending much on it.